This blog is about a passage that I read in "The End of Overeating" by David A. Kessler. In chapter 3 "Sugar, Fat and Salt Makes us Eat More Sugar, Fat and Salt", food is said to be palatable when it has the capacity to stimulate our appetite and prompts us to eat more. For food to be palatable it usually contains a combination of sugar, fat and salt. Palatable food generally arouses our appetite, rather than genuine hunger, that makes us eat more and more even after our calorie needs are satisfied.
According to a study conducted by Adam Drewnowski, initially he focused on sugar but was soon convinced that sugar itself is not the only reason we're so partial to sweet foods. He found that what we like is not sugar alone, but sugar in combination with fat. Fat, he wrote, " is responsible for the characteristic texture, flavor, and aroma of many foods and largely determines the palatability of the diet " (pg.13, "The End of overeating"). Mixing the same amount of sugar into low-fat and high-fat products, people invariably prefer higher-fat mixtures. Hence fat and sugar levels both influence preferences. Therefore eating foods high in sugar, fat, and salt makes us eat more foods which is very harmful for health leading to obesity and diabetes.
Your strategy of using context was a success. You mentioned the fact that you were writing this in a blog. It seems to be detailed yet brief enough to fit the average blog standards. Your paragraphs are unified and your ideas within them seem to be quite organized. Although this blog lacks in the areas of citation and quotation. In your first paragraph when you mention the book it is in quotations and is not in italics. Remember listing texts there is no need for quotations but you must italicize it. Also i see in your first paragraph that you attempted to quote from the text but you cited incorrectly. it is missing the Arthur's last name and page number as well as the parenthesis on each end. For an example >> "_______"(Yetman pg 5).
ReplyDeleteIn your second paragraph, again you are missing elements in the structure of citing. Here you opened the parenthesis with the page number but you did not have the Arthur's name. Remember the formula. "quote" (Arthur's name pg #). Also there is no need to mention the name of the book when quoting after you have successfully introduced the title in italics.
Note that i also closed the parenthesis and then i add the period.
Your critical thinking is where you really did an outstanding job. Your strategy of unpacking the quote was done successfully and clear. Your strategy of summary is good but its a little weak. Give more background about the book. what is it entirely about?. what is the main idea of this blog?. If you fix these minor issues i think this blog would be more stronger and clear to an outside reader such as myself. In conclusion i would like to add that your blog was very informative and detailed. It was a treat to read and i enjoyed the facts about sugar and fat. You have all the materials of a good paper but fixing these issues will help make it great!. KUDOS BRO.